Friday, March 7, 2014

Bottled

What inspired you,
 I asked him,
to make a bottle
 nine feet high?
He sighed and
 scratched his head,
shifted from foot to foot.
I could tell he hadn't much
talked about his art (or anything).
 Well, he said, I reckon I learned a
long time ago: people don't much want to
talk about how I feel, and why. Figured I'd need
a mighty big bottle to bottle up all my feelings,
so I set about making me one. Fascinating,
  I remarked. How's that working out for you?
 Just great! he said. I've sold a ton of bottles.
 I just keep filling em up and shipping em out.
And it does bring me some manner of
satisfaction to know, he said with a grin:
 people are paying big bucks for what
 I would've shared gladly
with all of them, free-of-charge.


**writing in community with Poetry Jam 

14 comments:

  1. What a wonderful write Brandee...I love it!! So many of us do bottle up our feelings, but how you portrayed it here is perfect....nailed it for the prompt! :-)

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    1. Thank you, Friend. Good to see you in these here parts.

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  2. ha. how interesting those last couple lines....and i think that in freely giving
    we might find a bit more freedom...

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    1. Yes, but isn't it interesting that sometimes people appreciate only the things for which they pay dearly?

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  3. This is pretty cool. I love the whole theme of this. And the twist at the end is priceless, no matter how much a nine-foot tall bottle would cost!

    Peace <3
    Jay

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    1. Thanks, Jay. So glad we've connected in the blogosphere.

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  4. This really makes you feel gratitude and hope, a gift freely given is so precious.

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  5. Wonderful write and I love that you shaped it like a bottle! The last lines were especially good.

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  6. Very clever, Brandee .. I love this.

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  7. A wonderful, insightful write with a bit of wink at our all-too-human foibles.

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  8. I LOVE THIS!!!!! PLEASE QUIT "PUBLISHING" YOUR CONTEST ENTRIES BEFORE THEY WIN YOU SOME BIG BUCKS! BRILLIANT MY FRIEND BRILLIANT

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  9. Very cool. Very interesting. Love your new profile pic too :)

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  10. Great write and I love the shape of the poem too.

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